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Uh, this IS part of a novel...

Firstly, writers are meant to maintain a ratio of reviews:own work of 2:1. Anyway, I may be being completely shallow, but i don't understand the poem. At first i thought ...

I like it, it got my attention quickly, but I agree with other repliers that you could just merge the introductions into the first few chapters. Or at least include ...

“You’re breaking up with me?” Devyn wrenched his fingers from the snagging confirms of his rough mid-length hair. Breaking contact with those piercing blue eyes, he noted two… three, happy ...

just another poem I whipped up for a competition. To know the secrets, know the lies, To hear all what goes on inside, To see all things, to be unseen, ...

Very funny, good work. I found Leah believable, as in the first chapter. The dialogue is good, but you could improve the story by adding imagery and more description of ...

“Um…yes…I really do.” I sat. While I did, I noticed a huge window facing the forest enclosed that was enclosed in the stone walls. I didn't quite get this. Are ...

OMG it does :O, but don't tell anyone! thanks for the positive responses!

This is a poem I wrote of a creative writing competition. First poem I've written in years, so please be nice :D. Nothing rhymes with purple Oh, nothing rhymes with ...

The repeat paragraph is a typo, sorry bout that... The title is in caps because it's an abbreviation, of which more will be learnt further on, but I'll change it ...

Will held his disgusting suit with one hand and grabbed the fruit with his right To me, it seemed a little bit odd to be general (one hand), then specific ...

Interesting. One of the first thing I noticed was the run-over sentences. Particularly: Sweat mingle and mix with smoke overhead vibrating to the beat that stir the air and tumble ...

“I know that, Meghan, but I she has to learn how to control her temper.” Tucker said. omit the second "I" Other then the already noted parts that need fixing, ...

I really liked it. The way you've written, as well as the actually content you've written, help me understand the main character. I look forward to reading more. I didn't ...

SCRATCH “Must… keep… going.” Sneakered feet hit the ground running, their owner’s heart beating a rhythm often used in hardcore rock; unrelenting, and unsustainable. In a manner often seen i