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ONE: BEFORE Let my teaching fall like rain and my words descend like dew, like showers on new grass, like abundant rain on tender plants.. Deuteronomy 32:02, NIV They say ...

Why hello there! Welcome to YWS! This is my first critique of a romance btw, so I'm no means an expert... onwards then :D The telephone sat atop a spindly ...

Still waiting for mine, down here in New Zealand :D I'm really excited, this is my first published work ever! Many thanks to Nate and everyone else!

Wow, unique idea, not what i expected. The way you wrote sorta keep me reading, will definitely look out for more! OK, things I found: It’s mouth seemed to be ...

Like Greyed, I have to say the title intrigued me. I like it how the scope of the story started on the protagonist, then widened to include the world, then ...

I thought the end was slightly rushed and abrupt, I'm not sure if you wanted the reader to feel that way but I was expecting more and was surprised when ...

very good, easy reading and paced nicely. I found the flow was slightly upset with the switch to Jonathan's perspective, but otherwise very smooth. I didn't really understand the final ...

ONE: A CAUSE TO DIE FOR A thousand shall fall at thy side, and ten thousand at thy right hand; but it shall not come nigh thee. Psalm 91:7 SPAIN, ...

Come On in your pants (andy hunter) CrushCrushCrush in your pants (Paramore) Feeling Good in your pants (muse) Going under in your pants (evanescense) I'm the New Cancer in your ...

This was never the case This just sounds odd, like your correcting yourself. Something like "It never used to be this way" would be better I think. The brother’s name ...

but the thugs were nowhere neat as accurate I assume you mean nea r . I liked it, the ending especially. The action was good, but seemed to just happen. ...

Please check my profile for previous part's; their quite old as I haven't been very active recently... The figure greeting Devyn with such careless style was garbed in a white ...

Agreeing with repeatedly-repeated comments on pace, I nevertheless liked it a lot. In certain parts of the story the suspense could be improved, but the overall image left me wanting ...

7/10 odd, but likeable

Oooh sorry I didn't realise, do you already have some posted here? there is part one... but shoudln't a link appear near the top of the page, under "possibly related ...