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Wow, this is an amazing piece of prose which has inspired me to write something similar based on real events. There were very few errors with this piece, although it ...

“Yes, honey?” she said in her thick German-English accent, tucking a strand of auburn hair behind Viktor's ear. Viktor flinched. “Mom!” Viktor managed to point his hand at the TV ...

BerlynRae: At the beginning! haha, well I've already managed to start the story I want to start thanks to Rosey's help with her useful article, but I guess other people ...

Rosey: Thank you! Annie: Thank you very much as well; I've tried that before, and it's a good tip for many but personally, it doesn't really work for me since ...

I'm just going to annotate where I have any additional comments. I really enjoyed it btw! I think it's good for your second try at writing. My second time trying ...

I really enjoyed this, your prose is excellent but just try to make sure it doesn't get too flowery and verge on the dreaded purple prose. Also, I personally don't ...

I suck at starting off stories. I get my ideas and characters clear and then I just can't get my feet off the ground. It's awful since I have the ...

I'll just annotate this in bold for ya. ;] Sshh, we won’t hurt you… Evie jerked awake and sat up suddenly, her heart pounding. She looked around her to see ...

Stephenie Meyer has saidophobia and it's really annoying- so I think it's best to use said usually, unless someone is shouting, murmuring, whispering, shrieking, squealing, crying, stammering or mutte

Love your writing since it's the one person in your life that you can change when it doesn't suit you! So, just keep on going, DO NOT read back until ...

I was seven and it was in school and as soon as I wrote one in school, I was hooked. The story was basically Magic Roundabout fanfiction. haha

That last paragraph is far too long. You're going to have to chunk that down into at least three or four smaller paragraphs. It seems that you forgot that when ...

I think people have covered what I wanted to say about it really. I love the concept and I hope to see more from you! '...I’m not as o-kay as ...

I'll annotate it in bold. (: Here in this street everything’s the same. Here in this street, people treat me with respect. People are afraid of me. Here in this ...

-stammery voice- Emm... emm... I'm new here so I'd better tell you about me. :B My name is Sophie, I'm 14 and from the UK and I'm the average school ...