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I don't know if this was intended as a short story or novel, but I hope you keep going with the story regardless! It was very good and I liked ...

When can we post again?

**hey if you were talking to me mandy, its all good.:D if you were talking to the actual lauren however, then whoops :oops: ** Lauren ~Lorey~ Lauren had spent the ...

Hello! I really need this reviewed. Its chapter two and if you want it to make sense then chapter one is right here:

Hello! I really want chapter two of my novel "As the World Crumbles" reviewed but I'll also give the link to chapter one so that chapter two makes sense :lol: ...

Lauren ~Lorey~ Lauren sat at the table feeling very self-conscious. It was strange to be in a new group of people. She thought of her friends in New York, how ...

I vote B =)

Lauren ~Lorey~ What am I doing here? , Lorey thought sitting in her car, keys still in the ignition. Isn't this the exact kind of thing teachers and parents and ...

I woke up to the sound of an explosion. And screaming. And crying. Still half asleep I stumbled to the window and saw that we were under attack. Buildings on ...

The sentences flow beautifully. The imagery in this story is also very good. HOWEVER :lol: by how wet his cough sounded This is a bit... I don't know...awkward? Maybe it's ...

Hello! Very nicely detailed story. Here we go: I can here others I'm sure that this is just a typo, however it is hear not here . “If you don’t ...

Name: Lauren (Lorey) West Age: 16 Appearance: Her thick dark red hair goes past her shoulders. She is 5'3" but seems taller because she is never without heels. Her pale ...

I really enjoyed this chapter. Your sentences flow amazingly well, and I only have two complaints, which don't even sincerely count as complaints as they are obviously typos. and when ...

I really liked this and I especially liked the detail. I hope you write more of this story. I say don't change a thing.

Hello! This is my first time on this site too. I just posted my first piece! It's really exciting. I hope you check it out and I'll be sure to ...