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hey thanks, yeah I've been working on figuring out where to break it up. Originally, the poem came from a project we had to do in a writing class I ...

Wow, I loved this poem! It was so interesting the entire way through. You did a great job incorporating a ton of detail, while still maintaining the flow of the ...

I agree that the lines "trapped" and "can't get out" could be combined, it might help the poem better. It also might be interesting if you tried getting rid of ...

I feel like this poem just needs to be expanded by using more detail. The initial message is known, but if you take it and try to add in more ...

Born a star, discovered at 15, Well on her way by 17. Ripped up jeans and a tie-dye shirt Knees show bruises through the holes Chestnut cherry hair lies messy ...

I really like this. It's easy to relate to. As it's been said before, just a few little rhythmic changes might help it flow better. But i really like the ...

My eyelids fall covering my hazel eyes, And I see you, tall and strong, handsome as always, dark brown hair, smiling at me And I see me, small but powerful, ...