quietloud798

I edited and everything so I hope it still works. Please tell me if it doesn't. Your comments really helped.

So I like the poem, and the idea of it But it's very repetitive In my opinion, just say what you mean the first time It makes much more sense ...

So... I'm very confused to be honest The last lines go together but the rest was kind of out there If you could tie it all in somehow and make ...

That's really amazing I love the part about love because it holds so true Your imagery is brilliant Keep writing!