queerelves

Thank you for the review! :D I really appreciate the advice, because it was helpful and specific enough that I now know what to work on. I'm going to go ...

I have the same problem with narration sometimes. It's really hard to write in first person without having that problem, which is actually why I rarely ever write in first ...

I have the same problem with narration sometimes. It's really hard to write in first person without having that problem, which is actually why I rarely ever write in first ...

I have the same problem with narration sometimes. It's really hard to write in first person without having that problem, which is actually why I rarely ever write in first ...

It just seemed like too much at one time, and it made it hard to follow what was happening.

It takes place about three years later, when Ian (and all of the other characters) are in college.

Thank you for the review! I definitely plan on elaborating on Ian's feelings about her death a little bit later on in the story. Her death is an important part ...

Thank you for the review :D I actually appreciate all the grammar criticism, because I always have trouble with grammar in my own writing, and I tend to be a ...

Ahh, gosh, thank you so much! :D I'm glad you liked it, and this gives me motivation to continue with the story!

Thank you for the review, and for the constructive criticism! I want to pursue this as a somewhat serious work, so I want to make it as good as I ...

Thank you for the constructive advice ^^ I'm always trying to improve.

I've only dabbled slightly in poetry before, so I'm glad you like it! Thank you for the compliments! :D

Thank you so much! :)

Oh my gosh I read it like five times and I never caught the fact that it said widow. That makes so much more sense.

Ah, that makes sense!