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Re: Beautiful Boy
helloo :) I love this poem!!! good work! I have one correction though: How beautiful you are, boy The love inside you give me joy, I think -give- should be ...
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Re: Love To Be.
hellooo :) nice poem! I like it..I don't have any criticism for you because the others aready took care of that :) I'm just gonna quote my favorite part XD ...
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Re: Old musketeer
helloo!! :) I like this poem! Love the story in it! Oh small child of mine do you hear The old stories of that one musketeer How he fought and ...
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Re: Walls
helloo :) beautiful poem/story!!! you captured those feelings really well!! I don't have any criticism..:) I just really enjoyed readig this nice work!! -qaralynn-
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Re: Small farm
helloo! :) nice poem! I like the rhyme in it and I like the imagery!! Little fish in the pond swimming so free The birds in the sky flying with ...
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Re: Open, simple
helloo :) really sweet poem!! I don't really have any criticism :) Life isn't as simple as you make it appear Even the happy people have a depth full of ...
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Re: Imagine Me and You..
heellloo XD nice sweet poem! I love the imagery in this. It calms me down! :) Imagine me and you on a ship, on a broken wooden mass; we float. ...
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Re: Trust
beautiful poem!! you've captured the feleings very well in this write!! Trust. A funny Five letter word You blew mine away absolutely love these two sentences Like dust My world ...
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Re: Not So Quiet After All
hellooo XD This is a really good piece!! I love how it's short and straight to the point!! my criticism: You may think I'm shy in class, Quietly waiting for ...
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Re: Only You
heey this is a reall sweet poem and I love it. your friend captured that feeling very well. Now we are severed. Cut into two but there is still one ...
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Re: Silly Me
sollyplushie!!!! XD hi :) I love this poem...don't have any criticism for you XD nice work!!
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Re: Her Eyes Of Gray
beautiful poem!! It's great! I love the rhyme in it and I especially like this part: Her sparkling eyes of blue, Have dulled to a simple gray, The life that ...
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Re: Untitled
nice poem!!! you should consider to take out the comma's in the last sentence: I’m alone in this;You can’t see me, All you see is a “good, innocent, naïve, girl” ...
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Re: I'll Be There
I like this poem! you should consider to maybe change -cryin'- into something that rhymes better When things tumble down around, Just keep your eyes on mine. I'll hold you ...
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Re: A Perfect Image
great piece! Most people don't see themselves like others do..I don't have any criticism really...:) nice!!
May 1, 2011