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Re: Untouched ch 15
OMG I LOVE THIS STORY! You're such a good writer! Great imagination! Well, in some of your sentences the begginng of your words the letters are capitalized. You might want ...
Sep 28, 2008 -
Re: Untitled
Beauty flowed from every inch of her body. She could feel every man in there looking her over. Vultures, every single one of them! She gingerly reached down to feel ...
Sep 25, 2008 -
Re: Untitled [1]
I really like this!!!! ITs' really good! Please post chapter two!!!!!!! If you don't I'll be depressed =[! There area a few mistakes but, I'm too lazy to point them ...
Sep 22, 2008 -
Re: World of Nanu, Chapter 2
This is really good! I like it and i want to read more! Please post another chapter! You're a really good writer. There are a few mistakes in here but, ...
Sep 21, 2008 -
Re: A Clean Bite--Chapter 1 part 2
Uh, not to be mean, but Ian sounds a lot like Edward from Twilight. I suggest you mix it up a little, I mean you don't have to change everything ...
Sep 17, 2008 -
Re: Poison Love- Chapter 5
This is really good! Uh, just to let you know some of your dialog looks like this “who’s music are we going listen to on the way?” You have to ...
Sep 17, 2008