plutogirl

this is really good i couldn't even find any spelling errors :roll: not that i was looking but anyways this was my favorite part of the poem because it relates ...

Here's a revision I took out some of the repition but there's still quiet a bit of it. Hope What happens when we lose hope? hope for a better tommorrow. ...

thanks for your help in a way i know your right about the change of mood but also it gets how i was feeling of complete hopelessness and anger and ...

wow that was awesome i don't know what else to say but wow :shock:

sounds like you know about as much as i do glad you liked it though i think

This it the edited version i got rid of the second poem Hope What happens when we lose hope? hope for a better tommorrow. hope that a problem goes away. ...

actually there's two poems on here and the puntuation is pretty bad because I have no clue how to punctuate poems Hope What happens when we lose hope? hope for ...

I like the dark I can read it a lot longer than the other

I thought it was really interesting. I found a few minor things but otherwise I thought it was great like an obedient puppy god. It may just be me but ...

Where to start with my favorite authors some of my favorites such as Anne McCaffrey have already been mentioned so I'll just add a few :P Lee Strobel Kevin Crossley-Holland ...

This piece was really good. I liked it but I'm going to nit pick anyways. The only thing that bothered me was you're use of the word there. The dark ...

thanks kay glad you find it funny since you were my inspiration lol :lol:

glad you two enjoyed it, and nope i wasn't talking about you :wink: it was someone else

This is just a silly poem but anyways enjoy :D crazy kay has gone away. whereto does crazy kay go? over that hill she goes. bad terrible crazy kay to ...

Thank you all for your advice as I said I'm going at this blindly so I'll take all the criticisms you have and come back asking for more. :D Here's ...