plainfinmidshipman

I really like this. There's some really great descriptions, and you did a good job of describing your emotions without getting whiny or angsty. What is the deal with the ...

Wow i really like this. I really like the satire at the end especially: The gossips, sighing, ease into their prying, reviving, at once, their hearts. I think that is ...

I love this poem!!! I disagree with the people who thought it didn't make sense. It is obviously about two people grounding a boat. Throughout the entire poem it seemed ...

Wow!! I just saw your addition to the story. (Sorry i didn't see it sooner. I was too preoccupied by my inverted syntax post) It is beautiful!!! And you have ...

Ok I will do my best to explain inverted syntax. If anyone can do better, please feel free to correct me (and i am sure somebody can!)! Inverted syntax is ...

I'm sorry I didn't mean that you should remove the superfluous words but instead i meant that you should rewrite the portions containing the superfluous words so that they were ...

I borrow lines frequently from other poets. My teachers say it is allusion. I always put the lines in italic.

So you don't think this could go in dramatic poetry?? i really like this very much. I am very interested in the story and i love how it is a ...

I disagree with xanthum gum. I think you can break away from the rhythm in the verse for dramatic effect. However I agree that in the third line you should ...

I really love this sonnet. I think you have done a beautiful job. I'm sort of confused though by the punctuation in the first line: I think: this mire is ...

I really like this poem I especially love the first line: "It wasn't as if you left your house in order" but I had a lot of questions. For instance, ...

i actually really like the last line of the poem. it is my favorite part. I think maybe if you put more plant imagry in it could definately work.

I think that because you have so many beautiful images in your poem that you should break up the lines to create more space for them. As already mentioned your ...

amity

The writing is excellent. However, there is something about angel which is not entirely convincing. Why did he have such a sudden change of heart about the gang? If he ...