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  • Poetry » Romantic, Realistic
    Re: Description

    It's been a while since I've been on here. Lets see if I can dust off the rust. I'll start with I like the poem. Description of what ever you're ...

    Dec 18, 2013

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Magnificat of My Angelic Friend

    Man, it’s been what, over a year sense I was last on this site. It’s time to dust off the cob webs. Ok, I really like the poem. It flows ...

    Apr 5, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Autumn time

    I like it a lot. It flows easy and the rhyme scheme fits just fine. I did see a few things though. In the sixth line I feel it doesn't ...

    Jun 20, 2009

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: Extinguished

    Very nice piece of literature. Over all I very much liked it. When it comes to grammar and such I'd run through it one more time to make sure you, ...

    Apr 14, 2009

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: poem

    Blink seems to have covered the technical stuff, so I wont bother repeating it, but there are one or two more things I can add. Let's see: 1) Understanding. I ...

    Jan 24, 2009

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Goodbye

    Over all I like it. You have good strong feelings in this poem, but as always there are a few things to add. 1) Punctuation. Cammas, periods, question marks, they ...

    Jan 24, 2009

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Blind

    Over all I liked this piece. It flowed alright and its imagery was there. Even so it's no perfect and that is way we are here. Alright, here I go. ...

    Oct 12, 2008

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: I never told you I loved you

    I really liked this. I couldn't really find anything wrong. Your voice was good, very powerful. Your description was also simple, but clear. When it came to the rhythm I ...

    Sep 21, 2008

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Why?

    Over all I liked it, but I'm going to point something out that always gets under my skin and not everyone does. Adding punctuation to their piece of writing. I ...

    Sep 14, 2008

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Saying Goodbye

    Over all, I very nice poem, but nothing is ever perfect. I only noticed a few thing though, so don't worry. This seems to always happen with new members and ...

    Sep 3, 2008

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: iFantasy

    Lets see, I thought it was nice, but it needs a lot of work all the same. I'll point out what I think can be fixed. 1) Idea: Your poem ...

    Sep 2, 2008

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Katrina Story

    "Sigh" where do i begin. The poem is so long and repetitive, I had trouble finishing it. I know of long poems, but this says the same thing over and ...

    Aug 31, 2008

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: Indians in the rain?

    I like this one as much as I like the other. In terms of this one your imagery is 100 times better. Good Job! Also, the way you broke up ...

    Jul 8, 2008

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Dead?No.

    I really liked the poem. The idea and the way you showed it was great. The only thing I see wrong is in your structure. Your line breaks seem off ...

    Jul 8, 2008

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: i'm so sorry

    I like the idea that you're shooting for, but you didn't hit the bulls-eye. The poem is very sketchy and the idea was hard to grasp at first. Give us ...

    Jul 6, 2008


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