piepiemann22

It's been a while since I've been on here. Lets see if I can dust off the rust. I'll start with I like the poem. Description of what ever you're ...

Man, it’s been what, over a year sense I was last on this site. It’s time to dust off the cob webs. Ok, I really like the poem. It flows ...

I like it a lot. It flows easy and the rhyme scheme fits just fine. I did see a few things though. In the sixth line I feel it doesn't ...

Very nice piece of literature. Over all I very much liked it. When it comes to grammar and such I'd run through it one more time to make sure you, ...

Blink seems to have covered the technical stuff, so I wont bother repeating it, but there are one or two more things I can add. Let's see: 1) Understanding. I ...

Over all I like it. You have good strong feelings in this poem, but as always there are a few things to add. 1) Punctuation. Cammas, periods, question marks, they ...

Over all I liked this piece. It flowed alright and its imagery was there. Even so it's no perfect and that is way we are here. Alright, here I go. ...

I really liked this. I couldn't really find anything wrong. Your voice was good, very powerful. Your description was also simple, but clear. When it came to the rhythm I ...

Over all I liked it, but I'm going to point something out that always gets under my skin and not everyone does. Adding punctuation to their piece of writing. I ...

Over all, I very nice poem, but nothing is ever perfect. I only noticed a few thing though, so don't worry. This seems to always happen with new members and ...

Lets see, I thought it was nice, but it needs a lot of work all the same. I'll point out what I think can be fixed. 1) Idea: Your poem ...

"Sigh" where do i begin. The poem is so long and repetitive, I had trouble finishing it. I know of long poems, but this says the same thing over and ...

I like this one as much as I like the other. In terms of this one your imagery is 100 times better. Good Job! Also, the way you broke up ...

I really liked the poem. The idea and the way you showed it was great. The only thing I see wrong is in your structure. Your line breaks seem off ...

I like the idea that you're shooting for, but you didn't hit the bulls-eye. The poem is very sketchy and the idea was hard to grasp at first. Give us ...