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Hey! I just wanted to address a few specific passages and overall themes from your poem. All but one was given, Where His love enlightened, Alas he was forgotten, On ...

thanks everyone for your input! Lunasol21, thanks for your stanza by stanza breakdown. I will definitely utilize your suggestions!

TabbyGirl/Ziggiefred Yeah...I agree that that stanza was probably I bit overdone. I'm not exactly sure what I was aiming and the point that I was trying to make. I'll probably ...

@)!) Another year, another day, Time passes by ever faster, In an ever-sickening display. Head weak, knees buckling, The immense weight of existence, Borne for what purpose? To love, to ...

Hey!! I really liked how you offered both sides of the story to a relationship in a structured way. It's really a unique piece of prose that I do not ...

Hey! I like this poem and I think you effectively put your emotion into it. I was only a little confused with the dominant impression you were trying to portray. ...

Hey there! This poem that you wrote is to say the least great. The way your express your emotion in the poem really flows nicely due to your parallel structure ...

Hey! On an overall basis, I really enjoyed your poem and found it very easy to relate and feel the same emotion you describe. One of the things you did ...

Glance Walking: another day, another hall, Quickly she sneaks by, Unbeknownst to my eyes: Of what my heart truly cries I could turn around, Follow her to next class, But ...