peskychesk

Well girl. once agen a marvellous little story. Only really have the one point to make about this little oddity. About a quarter of the way through there is the ...

Like everyone above, I found this to be a really nice little piece. However it depends on whether you plan on turning this into a novel or just a short ...

Very good, but like Lucyy I feel you need to show more of James' thought and feelings/emotions. Your story has a slightly disconnected feel. Mainly I agree with lucyy's comments ...

This is a good start. It leaves many questions unanswered and so draws the reader in. However i have some comments. Firstly: Not my view, she reminded herself, It is ...