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Re: Wasting Time to Camouflage
I liked this poem. It has some good points and descriptiveness in the beginning, but I felt like towards the end, it turned into a letter. Maybe if you added ...
Jun 28, 2010 -
Re: My death wish
This poem was slightly confusing for me also, although I believe I got the gist of what you were saying. It has a powerful message behind it if you read ...
Jun 28, 2010 -
Re: The Gate
HI! I liked the imagery in this poem, although there may be a bit too much. It took me a couple of times to see what it was saying, but ...
Jun 28, 2010 -
Re: Across The Dreams
This is a really nice poem. I can see in my head all the things you are describing and I went back to read it again once I was done. ...
Jun 28, 2010 -
Re: If Roses Grew Where Petals Fall
This poem is very good and really checks in with me personally because I have recently lost my wonderful grandmother. I love all the visual descriptions and the sincerity of ...
Jun 28, 2010 -
Re: have you ever
Another repetitive one. Old habits die hard. Reviews are always appreciated though! ashlyn :elephant: Have you ever ridden the ride of suffering Taken the path of pain Drunk the wine ...
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Re: feeling
Feeling What’s happening to me? What is this feeling raging inside my brain? Worming its way into the daily stretch of the life I live Or tries to anyway. Each ...
Jun 28, 2010 -
Re: Untitled
wow. I didnt expect to get such a response for something that took me a few minutes to write... im flattered:). Thanks for all your help! ashlyn :elephant:
Jun 28, 2010 -
Re: The Insanity
Thanks guys. I appreciate the reviews. I will keep your comments in my thought bank for future use. Ashlyn :elephant:
Jun 25, 2010 -
Re: Untitled
*chuckles* Thanks guys! It took me about 3.34 minutes to write. I just wanted to post it on a whim.I appreciate you taking the time to review it though, and ...
Jun 25, 2010 -
Re: The Haunting Voice
This is a really cool poem. I like how you combined present and past tense. I also like how you combine both love and fear for the same person. It ...
Jun 25, 2010 -
Re: Untitled
I want to write a poem here But I can’t think of what to say So I’ll sit here and look at you In an exasperated way. No words have ...
Jun 25, 2010 -
Re: The Gaping Hole
Thanks guys! I appreciate the feedback and will tweak the poem accordingly. Ashlyn
Jun 25, 2010 -
Re: My Will
I love how much emotion you put into each stanza. Each one was concise but conveyed the message well. I really enjoyed it. Im just learning how to review or ...
Jun 23, 2010 -
Re: The Insanity
Hi Chardinay, you have a pretty name. Ok, you wanted to know what it was about so here goes: The main character is a girl who has inherited a mental ...
Jun 23, 2010
