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Someone was chasing me. We were in a dark forest. Fog was creeping around me. Leaves rustled and I heard the twang! of an arrow shot by a bow. Pain ...

i couldn't stop! it was very interesting! but, the title seems a little, well, unfitting.. it clearly tells you that it is a story about lion people, but, not very ...

Someone was chasing me. We were in a dark forest. Fog was creeping around me. Leaves rustled and I heard a shot. Pain coursed through my leg and I saw ...

Hey! You know me! Yah, i ain't gonna say my name. but anyways, great job. spelling errors, but nothing else. hey, get back from your trip soon!

it was pretty good but not a very eye-catching story. i may be wrong and you might have the most epic story ever, but this intro was a little short ...

it's really interesting and the plot is interesting. i think it has a few grammatical errors, but otherwise, it's really good!

im dying of boredom! JUST PLZ! BE HARSH!

advice advice advice. COME ON!

awesome writing! great job

really good! keep on going! it actually got my attention, if you don't know and probably you don't, I usually am not caught by any good stories lately.

It was really interesting. I am so gonna read the next chapter! Good plot!

PLEASE GIVE ME ADVICE! I NOW HAVE CHAPTER 1 READY!

I was a little bit confused at the beginning, but I finally realized that "Melanie" is Jemima. Good writing. Really good plot! :elephant: :mrgreen: :smt003 :D :) :o :smt001 :smt002 ...

Loved the story! great way to mix it up! i enjoyed reading and want to know who romeo's other love is!

Really interesting! When there is dialogue, create a seperate line. other than that, perfect!