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I took deep a breath, “I am going to be late.” I repeated to myself, one hundred times to calm my nerves. You have an issue or two with punctuation ...

Eyes. I can see them. I can sense them. And they look at me, And they inspect me, And suddenly I’m different. I like how you end your lines abruptly ...

Hiya Blot! Here to review. OK, I mostly found that the stanzas vary in length much more than I'd like to see them do. You could maybe break them up ...

Done yours June! I am now free. But I don't want to be free. So, neeeext! :D

I loved it June. Loved. It. But since when is June known to write something I don't love? :D OK, I found that you had a nice flow, rhythm, and ...

Looking at the previous responses on this page, there hasn't been one really thorough review/ critique. I am here to change that, mwahaha >=) My eyes pacing to find an ...

I can't find much to critique because of the length, I'm sorry. Try making it longer, maybe? Actually, for a subject like this, it can only be made so long... ...

Hiya! I'm April, nice to meet you! So, before I say anything else, I'll lay down the ground rules for you. :arrow: No chat speak. We are writers, and should ...

Hello! I'm April, nice to meet you Warrior Girl! Welcome to YWS, since you seem to be partially new. ;) Ok, lets get started; Voices, voices all around me, I ...

Whoa June. You toned them perfectly, and all. Black and white really works on the pictures you used them for, and I don't think they could be any better. Perfect ...

Hi there! I loved this piece. Loved. It. I normally dislike romantic fiction very much, and dispise visiting the forum, but this piece is awesome! I didn't find anything to ...

Hi there! April at your service *bows*. I absolutely love hiakus, but I find them extremely hard to critique, so don't blame me if I'm wrong here. ;) I found ...

Hi there! You look partially new, so welcome to YWS! :D I'm April, and I'm here to leave my comments and opinions behind. I know it sounds bad, but it ...

Hi there! I'm April. I love how you wrote this in honor of the veterans; it's so sweet. But I do have some nit- picks... About the title. You spelled ...

Hi there, and welcome to YWS! I see this is one of the first things you've posted here. You'll look back on this piece when you have more seniority here, ...