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We work for our children, to but buy them clothes, food, etc. the etc doesn't belong here try: and anything else they want or something along those lines and in ...

Poem, This is good. I can imagine the fall scenery but I don't know what the girl looks like or the mill house, not really. It would make it longer ...

Jenna it was all thanks to Snoink but I don't know about every one else but I loved helping write it.

Hi Tuna. I'm going to review your story today. So here goes. I didn't really see anything wrong with it grammatically. I shatter the wooden door with barely a push. ...

JK, this was so sad. The emotions were amazingly well written and thought out. The only thing I saw wrong with it was: He stood, rooted to the pot (spot), ...

Elinor this helps a lot. Now I know about were my story is and how it would fit into a plot diagram and such. The examples helped because I could ...

I liked how William is just minorly injured at the the end, it was different than usual stories about this sort of thing. I think maybe this could go in ...

I'm not great at poetry but the fact that there is no punctuation caught my eye. I know that with poetry punctuation is used differently but you should probably have ...

Nate, we can't find the Will Review for Food thread. Is it a sub forum somewhere or something? ~peanut~

Bolt you say giant aliens attacking the earth and enslaving us and us rebelling I say The Twilight Zone. ~peanut~

This is for Stella's Retell a fairytale contest. It's a retelling of the Brother's Grimms' fairytale "The Spindle, Shuttle and Needle". Some quotes are from the original story. This story ...

Okay, here are my good members: Linx: because she's one of my best friends and isn't afraid to tell me when I'm wrong. June: because she's just so awesome. Stella: ...

Hey, Nate, I was just wondering why it took me three times to be able to post this. I got to the forum but when I hit reply (there was ...

Hi Skeleton! Welcome to YWS. I'm Peanut nice to meet you. Here are a few rules for the site: *The 2:1 ratio, this means that you need to review twice ...

Hi Cubed I'm Peanut! I write prose, poetry is not my thing. But the members here will give you good critiques on your poetry. Here are just a few rules ...