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This was a very good poem, like Grin said the topic was handled very well. But I agree with Dreamer. If you read back through and focus a little more ...

Leza that's insane, to be done with out a tablet. Wow....Anyway the only thing I see that could really be wrong with it is her neck. Now I can't draw ...

Kammie I'm not going to comment on you doodles since they are doodles and much better than mine :) Your elephant or as Demi said in chat your epicphant is ...

Wow Howler I agree with the others that this was very unique. I loved how you incorporated his name into another person (his daughter's) life. This lesson that some one ...

Hi Leza! I'm going to rearrange it like I told you I would just so it will flow a little better, plus it will be a little easier to read. ...

Hello, very creepy poem :). But that's okay I like creepy. A heap of broken bones lay there , The caved in skulls, the marrow s of the ribs split ...

Now I see what it is! It's a tiger a white one, A mother with her new born son. A stick cracked her ears pricked, Okay this is one thing ...

Lassie. This is beautiful :) I already told you she looks like my friend. Which is insane by the way. The only thing I really see is her arm. It ...

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Congrats! Happy Birthday to your novel :) Welcome to YWS Molly I hope we will get to see your novel if you post it. There are a lot of people ...

I agree with the other posts this could have had so much more emotion. I felt like you were just telling us what happened instead of describing what was going ...

Hi Passion. This piece reminded me of "Everybody's Fool" by Evanescence, just thought I'd throw that in here since others have said it reminded them of something. I'm going to ...

Now I know why I don't write poetry. I am like Dreamer, looking too deep into the poem. I got confused.....And I will tell you where so you can tell ...

I agree with some of the previous posts you could really expand on this. Narrative poetry tells a story, which is what you are doing but it could be much ...

Okay, wow. I think Flemzo covered a lot of the punctuation. I agree with Flem 100%. You have to put end marks in poetry. Like Flem said on your other ...