parisanmilo

It blasted all her hurt, and her heartache, She stopped helping herself, wishing someone else did, And turned the volume up, her sorrow awake, Tears filling the brim of her ...

gosh icaruss, that was harsh well anyway, i kinda agree with his main and basic, underlying thought about the piece, it's pretty typical and it's called school politics, humans generally ...

Just wanted to point something out. You jumped into the story without introducing the character at all. uhh... is it necessary?

haha, love the ending. 'Let's elope' sounds more realistic. try 'sending shivers down her spine.' 'The morning was sunny/the sun so bright.' repetition of sun(ny) shows lack of vocab. and ...

yea, totally thanks (:

it's called a prose poem. or free verse ask your friend whether shakespeare is blank verse or prose. =.=" try 'Get out! Get out! Get out!' increases emotion and suspence ...

Her presence stole the room, Heads turned, Hearts filled with envy, Eyes burned. With every step she took, Life engulfed us, The atmosphere awakened, As she chose a glass.

dude try going through 7 years of repetitive 'break-ups' and tell me whether it's overdramatic to not move on and see life itself. the poem reminds me of a clichéd ...

loving this poem, it flows quite very naturally, and the message's really beautiful the 'just' in line 2 is a bit awkward and disrupts the flow a bit, 'when' in ...

the quoted parts are indents, couldnt find any.

I guess it was the allure of it all that drew me in, the luxury of possessing this piece of advanced technology, this seemingly marvelous invention. It was, could you ...

Welcome to my world, my private little stage My own morbid drama, blood on every page I’ll send you the draft, sealed with distant tears Maybe you’ll read it; I’d ...

nice repitition in opening and closing rhyme is the second stanza missing 2 lines? I always wanted you As I often still do try 'I've' instead of 'I'? Hanging onto ...

*if not then uhh.. what type of poem is this? oh and uhh the structure's a bit weird (if it's supposed to be a type of poem [structure-wise]}

seems clichéd, extremely. is it free verse? or prosepoem? more definite and clear rhyme scheme needed. if not uhh... why's the guy a skank? i thought skanks were promiscuous women.. ...