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Hi! OK, here are some things I noticed: With their mission completed, the two SAS men decided to look around, what they found in the base had led to a ...

Thanks a lot for the review^^ It really helped clarify some of the things I was thinking about. And I'll definitely work on my over-description, which sadly, is one of ...

Wow. Thanks for all of the input. I really appreciate it :D Most of what you said are things I completely over-looked and I obviously need to go back and ...

Swords clashed, sending sparks cascading through the night air as battle cries peeled out like broken bells from every corner of the valley. The cloudy winter sky was tinted a ...

Though both can be good ways to start a book, I personally like to start things off dramatically. Action is always a good way to captivate a reader's attention, so ...

Well, I thought I'd do this in the cookie pattern thing (I really can't remember it's exact name right now, but it's the good-bad-good form of criticism. You know the ...