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Hey again! :) Thanks for the clarification about mistakes, was a little confused! It really helped, because I'm really addicted to this story and just want it to be the ...

And what spelling mistakes did you notice? I only thought of 'magick', but in my story thats how I'm spelling it. Help me out? Thanks. :)

Thanks for the review! No offense taken, honestly its fine I prefer constructive critisism rather than someone telling me its good when its not. So I know what you mean ...

Chapter 2 On the short journey to my room, my cubby, I run into Fred and Lina waiting patiently a few corridors down from the Master’s quarters. They are murmuring ...

Hey :) First off, this is really cute. I love how it is symbolic of friendship, I could see you had a personal connection with the poem, so that was ...

Hey, just here to review :) So...I think it's a great start, has lots of potential, but I did notice a few things here and there I'll just nit-pick out ...

Once again, thanks very much for the kind words! Often what makes sense to me doesn't always make sense to everyone else, so that's okay! I'll definitely try cutting back ...

Thanks for the review! It may seem a little confusing, but I've written a lot more of the story and it becomes first person, it's about the girl herself and ...

Prologue The little girl was afraid. She had never seen a gun in real life before, only on television or the fake silver ones that you sometimes get with fancy ...

Hey! First off, I found this really intriguing from the start, got me gripped straight away! I particularly love the name you have given to the main character, Sre. Very ...

First off--- Whoa.... Second--- LOVED IT! I thought at the end she may have turned out stronger, repaired herself a little, but instead she met the same bitter end. Which ...

Chapter 1 For a moment I simply lay there on the ground, listening to the come and go of my breathing, and the laboured breath of the dying dragon laying ...

Hey! Just thought I'd have a look whilst I have the time! I agree with SlyNightOwl, about the image of the girl in school. But I didn't get the impression ...

Wow! Thank you SOOOOO much! I honestly didn't expect such amazing feedback! I've got loads more of the story written, so I'll definitely post some more! Great tips, exactly the ...

Thank you for the welcome! And the cookies ;) I really appreciate the help, I've never joined a blog for writers before and it's mainly a hobby. But a passionate ...