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i thought that this was pretty well written, simple and quick and absorbing. my only problem with it was that it was pretty predictable. i knew straight from the beginning ...

i liked this in itself, it was a really cute, kind of moving, piece about a guy and his girlfriend. i think the scene was set perfectly and that all ...

well thanks for commenting :). yeah, i'll work on that. ..i think it was clear when i first wrote it and then i swapped things around and edited too much.

this is brilliant.

[kind of long. but give it a chance, will you?] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Shane Robinson killed Anthony Sawyer. I heard about it two months after

"Whispering in a language I never really had a chance to learn" is one of my favorite lines. Don't change it please. Besides, it is getting across a slightly different ...

this is like Macbeth. it's pretty good, but put more detail into it. and more of your own emotions and descriptions.

i want to say thank you guys a lot (!) and that there are lots of things you can buy with 2.05 (e.g. a cup of coffee..)

I’m here again with my violent grin as the people assemble themselves into self-important groups in front of me. The talk between them reveals brilliant depth and shades of life, ...

the idea sounds like it could be fine, but they way you wrote it was rushed. it seemed like the outline of a story, not an actual story. you need ...

i think it's cool they're kissing. it makes the picture sort of strange and interesting. i just wish the drawing was a little better, or at least more touched up.

so is your old man picture.

this is really good.

wow this is really cool

lol I love this. good job.