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You are an extraordinary writer, you know that? I just gulp down every word, and when I'm finished I just want more. One thing I did notice was you used ...

The poking part was brilliant. Seriously. I could see it happening - it fit Lhilia and Luke's personalities so much! I also like the mean edge Luke's thoughts take when ...

Too Late I held on to my pillow with everything I had. Tears dripped from my eyes, hot and salty as they slipped onto my nose. They tickled somehow. It ...

Hi :D So, I really need help. 1. What's the main concept of Christianity to you? 2. What's the difference between a priest and a preacher? 3. Does being a ...

I think this was amazing. Nothing short of it. Only thing that might, just might, need fixing is stressing your MC's emotions at first, on the street - I wasn't ...

Luke's voice and Liliah's voice were very different and I enjoyed reading this in that aspect. I could tell right from the start and it was a very pleasant surprise. ...

Hi :D Here are some things that I think would bug a lot of people: Trying to please everyone. And suceeding. Gets an invite to all the parties, leads a ...

Don't Go Don't go. Those words seemed so ridiculous to me just a short time ago. Of course people will go; it's in our nature. Come and go, and then ...

Hi, I read the entire thing. I'm not very nitpicky, so I'm afraid I can't help you there. Now, to what I can help you with. By the way, I ...

I couldn't stop laughing. I mean, some parts were less funny, but the majority had me cracking up. Wow, your character is very original - not a lot of writers ...

Hi, guys!!! Thank you for reviewing! :D Runaway Marriage - chapter 1, part 2 My parents took turns pacing across the living room. They could wear the carpet thin if ...

My heart was beating so loudly in my chest; I thought it should burst out. I pushed through the doors, urging my feet forward. I could feel the momentum pulling ...

I know you already have a bunch of helpful reviews so I'm going to keep this real short. I love it. So much. It's very close to perfect, in my ...

I don't care about the paragraphs, let me say this first. I saw them, hesitated, then said, what the hell, and started reading. And then I realized you have the ...

I love this. I thought it was great. Ididn't think he fell in love too fast or it was too short for the story itself - I actually loved it ...