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I gave my best friend one of our super long hugs and hid my face in her long dark curls. She always smelled nice, like strawberry and cream. "Are you ...

Beautiful! Very nice imagery! I admit, I didn't understand the italics at first, but then I read the first spoiler and re-read them - and it was breath taking. It ...

I re-read it, and I love it! Wonderful! I'm not going to go line by line review, simply because I will have to highlight nearly everything blue :) I think ...

I love this! You did great!!! It's very hard to write about bullying, but you portrayed the emotions very clearly - you did very well there. I love your characters ...

Once upon a time, you made me smile. Honest, my heart would jump up to my throat, shouting "Oh NO!" yet at the same time shouting "Oh YES!" because I ...

Hi there! This exercise is harder than it looks, isn't it? Good job! I'm here to review :) My comments will be in red and the parts that I am ...

I cowered behind Elle's shoulder nervously, swallowing as my eyes followed a figure in the throng of students. "Did you see that guy?" I shivered. "He looks scary..." It wasn't ...

I love this! The only thing I didn't like very much was the first four lines, they felt very familiar and cliche. They were intruiging, but something about them didn't ...

I just wanted to drop by to say this was great! I love your main character - you got him through really well! You phrased everything very nicely! I really ...

I just wanted to say that you used this writing style very well! The plot was very interesting and I had a very enjoyable read. You did good! I can't ...

This was wonderful! I never expected the twist in the end! You did great! One little thing though... in the line "from a mattress" you sort of break the flow. ...

Thank you very much everyone! I'll work on a background story :) I'm really glad you liked it and am very grateful for all of your helping reviews! Thanks! Ofir

It's downright stupid that I miss you when you're right here. I can't help it, though, seeing as you're not really here. Yeah, sure, you smile for other people, you ...

I could find no faults. The emotion was so real... I'm sure almost anyone can relate to this, and yet you phrased it so beautifuly. I aboslutely love the play ...

I pounded against the bathroom door. "Jake, open up right now," I commanded firmly. I did a good job of keeping the anxiety out of my voice, though inside my ...