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Hahahahahahahaa!!! I couldn't stop laughing as I read it. As your average clutz, all of these scenerios had happened to me at least once. Nice going on the description of ...

Hey there everyone!! New chapter is finally up! Thank you, everyone, for all your help! This is a major breakthrough in the story. Please help! Chapter 7- The truth "Miss." ...

so, chapter 6! It's still short, but it took a lot of work, so please comment and help!!Thank you so much guys!! chapter 6- unexpected "I'm late," I looked at ...

Hey, so here's chapter 5, it's really short since I've been struggling with it. Help is needed! chapter 5 Kelly was hurt. Not that I was surprised by that fact, ...

Do I really have to repeat how much I love this? Only thing is changing Matt's reaction on ch. 8. He should grimace, press his lips in a tight line, ...

It's already at the bottom of the page, but it looked really interesting so I checked it out. This is really, really good! I love it! You should keep writing ...

I am so loving every minute of this! Just so you know, this is part of a chapter and not the whole thing. It doesn't feel like it's actually over... ...

Hello! Here's my latest chapter- I had a lot of problems getting it done, but here it is! Please comment and review- I need the help!!! Chapter 4 - end ...

You should put a dot after dead, makes it more dramatic. other than that, I think that you should tell more specific thoughts. Such as, coming to terms with the ...

Heya people! Please, please, please, comment, I really need the help!!! Thank you so much, MiriamHannah, you helped a lot with this!! Sorry it's so long guys, I just got ...

Okay, so I really have no experience with poetry or lyrics but I'm going to give this my best shot. It felt as though the beat was sometimes uneven, and ...

It honestly gave me shivers. I really do hope that you have more to follow up with it, that this is just the prologue. It did what a prologue should ...

Wow. Amazing, honestly. I LOVE it, I- I- *stammering* wow. Ok, *trying to be rational* your adjectives were amazing. I wish I could come up with that. During the start ...

thank you so so much to all who commented1 I appreciate it immensely! Comments are always welcomed. chapter 2- laughing The haze that covered my eyes now was ridiculous. I ...

Umm, wow. Seriously. Love it, you have no idea how much. Okay, so I don't have any critiques this time. I got to know you MC, got to like him, ...