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This was very, very nice. I enjoyed reading it- something to clear my mind with. It was interesting and it included zero conversation and dramas. I think it was very ...

I enjoy Cassidy's point of view! She's a very blunt, funny person. When she first said 'I do what I want and the rest of the world can go hang' ...

Nice story! It caught my eye, and I started reading! So, I didn't look for spelling or grammar mistakes to tell you the truth, it was interesting and sweet, and ...

The pen part was awesome! By the way, if she's in a small town like I think she is, then why don't people do a fund-raiser? That's what they always ...

Hey! So, I was brainstorming, and this is what came of it. I edited as well as I could, but I really need your help! This is a very, very ...

Your first and second paragraphs are brilliant, let me just tell you that. Everything was. You said 'not perfect' did you? Sorry to disappoint you, but I believe that [at ...

Okay, so, I was just wondering... not even one thought about Max? What's up with that? Not even a tiny thought about giving up on him now that she likes ...

I love it!!! Now, just to make something clear, she can't just tell him straight away that she loves him! I'd suggest an awkward silence as the two of them ...

Hey guys! Sorry about the delay. It's a very short chapter [yet again] and I really need your help!! Thank you so, so much. ofir. chapter eight- Running away The ...

Oh no! *squeaking* she's going to become popular and nasty, isn't she? And poor Kale is... oh no! Oh, damn *sniffling* and I was beginning to like her. I don't ...

I must say I like your writing stay. Now, the way you describe the body is kind of telly. You could say that his *hair color* shone i the sunlight ...

You wrote Matt instead of Alex at the beginning. Other than that, change the ending to something with a more... rememberable sound to it. You can totally tell this is ...

Wow I loved it!!! It was really, really good! I'm sorry I can't add more. There's just not much to critesize. I loved it all! Please please, PM me for ...

I don't think the band's drug addiction is creepy. It fits the style. It just shows they're amatures still. Anywho, I think we do get a glimpse into what Kyle ...

Cute meeting! You might want to add some commas, and what are we [the readers] to understand from her constant mumbling? That she's alone, without her brother, therefore filling the ...