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This was very interesting. It has been a long time since I've seen one of these stories about princesses and what not. The writing flowed, it matched the era, and ...

First off, and I just really need to say this, guys don't think other guys have great bodies. There. Other than that, they don't like shoping, at least not the ...

This is a very school-ish story. It doesn't have a major plot line, the introduction is very, very average, and the intro to the story itself - the coffee place ...

Hello First off, I loved it. It was very good, extremely so. Actaully, I'm having a hard time critiqueing this piece. See, plot wise, it's a cliche, which came to ...

Okay, so, as everybody commented - it was short. But I liked it. People tend to think there is something wrong in cliches - this was not, however, a complete ...

Okay, I liked it a lot. I mean, a lot. I thought there was a problem of info dump, however [I get that all the time]. How about you split ...

This was so funny! I especially loved the part about the keys. LOL. This rocks. By the way, great imagination, I probably wouldn't have been able to think of about ...

That was very interesting. First off, have mercy on our eyes and break off the paragraphs. The begining was a bit telly, and I was almost getting bored, but then ...

I'm kind of stuck from here on, reviews help keep me motivated, so please comment! Thanks for taking the time to read it! I hope things never change Chemicals. I ...

Different Chapter Three - First morning "I want her out of here!" Leila's cheeks were flushed red with chagrin, though the redness in Zi's cheeks was much more visible over ...

No idea why, but I was sure this was about teenlove in the beginning. Then when I realized the part where it was about your MC's grandmother, I laughed. It ...

This was, um, not very funny actually. Too much swearing, too implossible, nothing funny at all. Sorry, it was plain disturbing, and I really didn't like it. Shame, the first ...

Thank you so much for all the reviews! Chapter Two - The youth in the box Twister pranced around the space joyfully. "Our room!" she said, her voice high with ...

Wicked!!! I couldn't stop laughing! Especially the crits part/ :lol: So funny! You did a wonderful job with this. By the end the repitition [which was awesome at first] was ...

Chapter One – Strange crowd Eli stared. She tried to swallow, but her throat was completely dry. The guard pushed her a step further. She shot him an irritated glance. ...