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Your last line is the most used up line in the history of used up lines - I like it! It intruiged me - exactly what a prologue is intended ...

This was very interesting! There was one thing the matter though. Your commas were generally misplaced -sorry I can'tpoint them out right now - watch your grammar more carefully. I'm ...

I know you already got so many reviews, but I just have to say this. Wow. I loved this. It felt like I was there, like I could see it ...

Capital letters, yes. Watch that. Now, this was telly, but that was its charm. I liked the plot line a lot. The boy's character confused me a bit - why ...

It reminded me kind of Twilight, at first. I was almost about to suggest that you post in under fanfiction. But the end caught me off guard - I loved ...

I thought that this was a very good idea. What I felt lacked though was a narrator. It seemed to me like you were explaining an idea – a good ...

I thought this was very, very good. The descriptions were wonderful! I could almost see it myself. I liked the idea that he knew he was dreaming - one thing ...

I liked this a lot! I think it's amazing that you can accomplish this at your age, though age virtually says nothing. The story line was very good. I found ...

Hey there. I was trying out something new, I haven't even edited it yet, and I really need help with it. One of my first attempts at a short story. ...

I haven't written fantasy fiction in a while, so I really need help. Any comment would be appreciated. Thank you for your help! A lifeless secret - prologue Breathless, Erin ...

This was very good! I found myself deep into the story before I knew it. Nice descriptions, you watched the way they speak - nice. I thought that both of ...

I liked this a lot. It really did seem like Sam's point of view. The characters were really good, such as Beth, Sam's mother's behavior - a lot of mothers ...

I am still new to reviewing photographs so I can't help you very much. I can, however, tell you what I think - which is what I'm going to do. ...

Hi! I have never reviewed photography before, and I really don't know much about it, but I thought these were really good! I can only say this out of a ...

I really like this! It doesn't feel like it ends, you might want to consider a different ending. Right now there isn't much plot to review, but I really liked ...