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I loved the two first verses. The last one was very significant, because it tied it all up [in a very good way, by the way] but the rhymes weren't ...

I thought this was wonderful. It's a haiku, isn't it? Wonderful. The purpose of a haiku is to pass on the feeling you wrote - I could almost feel that ...

This was good. I'm not just saying that. I loved the ending. There were a few things that confused me though: And yield grapes, I didn't get that one. Also, ...

The Party - Chapter three I was gloomy throughout the school day, hoping something would cheer me up. I was back in school, finally, but it was absolutely no fun ...

The Party - Chapter two I growled sleepily at the people in the hallway. I knew it wasn't really their fault it was morning, but I couldn't help the desire ...

This was no big deal, I tried to convince myself feebly. I'd opened this door a million times before. No big deal. Even I could hear how lame my persuasion ...

I love this. So much. It makes me want to call my best friend and read it out loud while laughing. It's sincere and very genuine. I actually love the ...

Your haiku are nice, but the fact that you use a first person point of view in them lessens the quality of the haiku, for me. Furthermore, haiku are generally ...

I found this very strange. It was not my cup of tea in any way. You also forgot your capital letters. So, the review: The dinosaur explored the forest I ...

I would appreciate any sort of comment :) There have been many events which led me to writing this. Please tell me what you think. Thanks. I edited it - ...

I like this. It's nostalgic in the right amount, and the descriptions are really good. I don't have anything to critisize. Oh the only thing that bugged me was that ...

I love this. This is really, really good. Great job on the descriptions. I just can't find anything wrong with it, so I'm going to point out all of my ...

Tapping The tapping on my window started again. I breathed through my nose, closing my eyes. I needed to calm down. Just because I was the only one that heard ...

The tears welled up in my eyes as I ran. I felt light-headed. My mind was too busy racing with thoughts. There were many of them, all speaking up at ...

Priceless. I love this. I love your character's voice, and I love Alice's character. I love the plot - I love it all. Gresat job. No, sawesome. Pm me for ...