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  • General Fiction Novels Re: Positive Chapter Two (edited)

    I really like the story idea! I can see why Chase doesn't like Randy, Randy is acting like a big huge jerk. My only thing to say is making sure ...

    Feb 19, 2009
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Faces Show Different Emotions

    Hi! I'll be reviewing for you today and I hope I can help out a bit. First, this poem is rather short. It's always hard to review a meaningful poem ...

    Feb 14, 2009
  • Lyric Poetry Re: I Love You

    There must be some easier way to say these words, but no matter what I try and say, the wrong thing might be heard. I wish I could be there ...

    Feb 14, 2009
  • Action/Adventure Novels Re: Shiyru Tournament: Chapter Two

    “Lyra? Lyra! Oh c’mon, wake up!” I heard someone screaming and felt something shaking me on my shoulders. I opened my eyes suddenly and saw Quile directly above me. “Oh ...

    Jan 29, 2009
  • Romantic Novels Re: Sunny Side Up- Chapter one

    Well, you know me for telling you what is wrong and what is right. But this tiime, I'll give you some tips! Can't go wrong with that. 1. When writing ...

    Jan 29, 2009
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Betrayal

    Hey Suzy!! Just came to read your poem! First things first, I know other reviews said the same but oh well, make sure your punctuation marks are correct. It gets ...

    Jan 29, 2009
  • Action/Adventure Novels Re: Shiyru Tournament: Chapter One

    As soon as I turned, I saw someone who I never expected to see. My first thought was "are you a friend or foe to me" but I instantly shook ...

    Jan 23, 2009
  • Scripts Re: Town of Dissadent

    Some of this reminds me of how we were talking just the other night, lol. Anyways, it's interesting of how much you can imagine through a single script. It is ...

    Jan 17, 2009
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: The Shiyru Tournament

    As I'm going through to edit this, my only concern is to help me with sentence structures. Sometimes I can't tell if my sentence flows and if words should be ...

    Jan 17, 2009
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Zinglore Chronicles: Book One- Intro Part 2/2

    Good job, Kendall!! I like the fact you use just enough detail to get a picture going in my head. The krelt is still freaking me out a bit, but ...

    Jan 17, 2009
  • Welcome Mat Re: Hey dudes and dudettes!

    Hey Merana! Lol, I like saying that! OH YEAH! Merana and Cayden are here!! WOOT! Yeah, I'm kinda....crazy right now but oh well! Monday is officially OVER! See you tomorrow!

    Jan 13, 2009
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Love <3

    I always have this strange feeling when he's next to me, But he doesn't always see who I am, what I feel, or what I want to be. He's there ...

    Jan 9, 2009


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