nirvana

Ok you really really need to put in paragraphs its hard to read otherwise other than it was really good very moving!!!

Wow that was a brilliant story i really liked itit was really emotional and very good descriptive writing what i dont get is why she worked for the pimp if ...

good i liked it looking forward to the rest make sure to give a background on the charactersand watch the spelling and grammer looking forward to it!!

i really really liked this it flowed from one stanza into another and used brilliant emotions and imagery looking forward to the next one!!

I really liked this it was very emotional looking forward to your next piece!!

Wow!! That was brilliant!! very good use of emotions and was a surprising end. I really liked it and am looking forward to your next story!!

Wow I love this poem its so emotional!! You've got real talent cant wait for your next one!!

It was good very un expected but you should have explained more it still was very good!!

It's good but moving way too slow you need to tell us more about the character, you are getting too caught up in descriptions and that he hates the gods ...

Its good but its very heavy reading hard to follow some times, other than that very good!!

Thanks alot thats great advice il try to take it on board for my next story!!

Hi there!! I liked your story,it pulled you in and it had a very sudden unexpected twist, the only thing was it moved kind of fast and you need to ...