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:) wow that is so powerful that I cannot grasp or understand it! hmm...please, if you can, mail me an explanation, though I don't require one. I liked the flow ...

wow...you REALLY need to rework this. I'm just gonna rewrite the WHOLE thing, because almost every sentence is missing a little something... Chapter 1 The Hard Assault(capitalize the title) “Go ...

wow that was extremely good vocabulary :P and it capture the scene perfectly. i dont much like your combination of rhyme and non-rhyme, but thats just my opinion.

That was really good. I sniffed out an error: IWho truly are we? other than that, it was good :) it reminds me of Neon Genesis Evangelion, if you've ever ...

Z here. its a pretty good prologue, but I think it should be cleaned up a bit. i believe snow-covered and corpse-strewn should have a dash(-) between them. also, i ...

well, you had many spellling mistakes, among wich you spelled 'feel' 'fell' twice, and in your sig you spelled vampire vimpire. well, this was kinda a boring chapter, and im ...

well, kristina, youll see....anyway, tim, good ol sis(literally), you did well, overall. good improvement. everyone stay tuned, weve gotten great ideas so far on this series(yes, we)and its great!! :b

“what your saying is that until Timber achieves independence, something that might not come for another few years, we have to do whatever you say?” your should be you're, simply. ...

well, you dont have to take my advice, but i think that some of the rhymes were lame, put in just to keep the rhythm :P example: the mink thing. ...

interesting...something about a breakup, but for the most part i dont get it :? sorry. it tells a story, right :? :? :? :? :? :? :? :? :? :? ...

this is pretty good ....got me in a poetry mood :D i like how its short it leaves you questioning and pondering. who/what were you thinking of when you wrote ...

yeah what dynamo said : finally your bringing the whole of the leaf village into the picture. one mistake, though: They held onto the dragon’s neck spines as they were ...

man you did your research...really. a little weird with the whole testicles thing, in my opinion. but the end action was good, and the whole thing somewhat realistic. scary, yet ...

sorry my computer went berserk on me and erased my comments, but most of them werent too important. :( anyway, I LOVED this chapter, you just keep getting better! lookin ...

whats a T-Board? and if the skateboard hovers, that means it a hoverboard, right, like in back to the future part 2? well, sounds cool. Squall sighed and went in, ...