nightmarebook13

sorry didnt mean to put that in there twice! :cry:

Hello! Okay I noticed a couple of things, watch your spelling and grammar. Proofread your work before you sumbit. You had a couple of added words in there and I ...

Hello! Okay I noticed a couple of things, watch your spelling and grammar. Proofread your work before you sumbit. You had a couple of added words in there and I ...

thank you! i love poems with some type of ryhme... any suggestions? and same with the vocab , and potry books . which ones should i try? thank you :D

lol... sorry i really i really loved it :D

Suffering Candle The candle light flickers it lights up a small area, of the darkness. The wind blows, The area is suddenly, filled again with darkness. His eyes glaze over, ...

this was very good. as said before you did use "last night" alot.

If that's how you write when your bored than forget your life and write.... Woot for boredom! I'm not quite sure if its a poem... .but then again I assume ...

there are a lot of unanswered questions that you might seem to think are obvious to the reader like, did her love her?, were they dating?, why is it so ...

Well written!! Great ending left suspense! Is the 2nd line suppose to end in anything?? Otherwise I think it was great... I have had dreams like that. :elephant:

This was pretty good... but it wasnt flowing.... :cry: try to center around that and keeping the point very clear

Yours truly Whenever he looked at me I would always smile, I pick up the phone and am about to dial When my cell goes off I listen to hear ...

It was a great poem just really I don't feel it was strong enough or maybe if you wrote it a little longer it may have become a little stronger....

hey.... awesome work! i love it..... keep writing :D

Hi Everyone! Well my names Nicole. I'm 14. I like to write but have a problem w/ sent. frag and really bad with grammar and spelling ... which is really ...