niccy_v

First of all, this story baffles me. The POV you’ve taken means you have to use ‘him’ ‘he’ a lot, which is very confusing. Use names more often or make ...

Mostly been said but i'll give my two cents Interesting. It’s quite, um, emotional. Though I would not consider it a story as such because nothing happens. No setting (other ...

Ooh i liked this. :lol: It’s a great story, I really like it! Even though you’re telling a lot of the story and it does get a bit laborious here ...

Woo. Imaginative. I wonder how much of this applies to your personal experiences?? I joke! I am in the process of editing... it's very good. Well done Shall be back ...

Okay i have read all the ones you've uploaded It does not in my view become less baffling. No mean to be rude... but you really should review some books ...

Very short :0 You did not really give much to critique. It was mainly typos/spacing/repeating yourself. I hope it IS continued. That wasn't much of a story i am afraid. ...

i did a heap when i got out of my exam So now i'm about... 46,201 It'll be slow progress from here. I have officially ended the story. Ahhhh

No can do for my story haha. I can TRY but no guarantees. I dare somebody to include a character hell bent on becoming the president... not so hard

Can't say i've had an actual conversation with a character *looks at you crazy load of people strangely* but my characters frequently wander off and do their own thing. For ...

39,402 How can you be at 50k already????? Ahh that is amazing.

Another POV of the main character in this chapter. Each chapter is another character, another POV My mother held the camera in shaky, wrinkled hands, snapping wildly as I emerged ...

Rated for content more than language/violence etc It's just a short little thing i whacked together at the beginning of may and never looked at it again until i was ...

Mine's changed to Butterfly Wings

okay I sort of get where you're going. Righto i'll do that now..

37,800 *sigh*