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Hmm i'm sorry but this story is way predictable It's SO obvious from the beginning what is going to happen - and i read the next chapters and what happened? ...

Cut in half in case it was tooo long? --- We stand facing each other, neither of us daring to feel the other as the minutes disappeared between our hot ...

Pretty much, it has frequent (italics) flashbacks of them before the car accident that forced Rochelle to move, and now she's back for a three week visit. I'm unsure if ...

Oh, then there's this creep. He's the bad guy but i reckon he's about as close to a human-vamp as i could get. He looks like a vampire... in some ...

Righto, i know this is Johnny off OC but he's the perfect Jonah for my story. The perfect person. He's too human which is what i really wanted in a ...

My final One. My last name is there but im not posting it on a forum :|

Oh Ashleylee.... aboutt the tanning? Tans shine if you slather on enough oil. I know enough tanning-lotion-addicts to know tanning lotion shines. haha. Kind of gross in some ways i ...

You're mean to leave it hanging like that! Arrggh! Woow so many chapters. I will get back to you ASAP!!!!

Oh i hate you insomnia. How much of a life do you have right now?? Teehee Damn i wish i could write 84000 words in 15 days

48864 Urgh neeearly there.

yeah um... my bad. I guess it was more subconcious than intentional (new kid thing) but errr i'll leave that for later editing, i quite like it XD oh well.

This was highly interesting. But why would the guy want to kill Arnold if he still had a few days? And the guy obviously expected him to live to have ...

Woah mega sorry.. must've gotten the wrong window open. here: That is an interesting piece. I laugh at the man who thinks he can move a huge whale with his ...

omg omg omg i love this story... :P Most of my editing, what there is, is in the document below. Firstly: With text messages you can put numbers, rather than ...

This is overall pretty good. i see potential. EDIT!!!!!!! It's like the main thing to do. And you have failed to do that. If you had you would've picked up ...