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Re: Vampire Super Models
Heya Lovly_audrey! Glad this part came at last! Critiqually, there isn't much to correct. I guess, only the punctuations are needed to be put into account. So, here they are.... ...
Jun 20, 2009 -
Re: Phantasm:Chapter Two (Part One)
Finally...here's the next chapter. It took me ages to finish, polish and publish this but I'm certain you'll enjoy it. It was now having some sort of romance in it ...
Jun 3, 2009 -
Re: Vampire Super Models
Heya Lovly_Audrey! So this is the second chapter I've been waiting. Yeah, I'm glad to say that you did, again, a very great job... Very well done! Perhaps, you could ...
May 26, 2009 -
Re: Vampire Super Models
Heya! Welcome to YWS! :lol: You really got a nice talent in writing...honestly, I didn't find any errors on your work, whether grammatically, word structures and orders or choice of ...
May 22, 2009 -
Re: In 24 Hours
Heya! I loved your piece - more on the fact that it tackled DEATH. And DEATH was also my subject as I wrote my hopefully-to-be-a-novel story entitled Phantasm. First thing ...
May 21, 2009 -
Re: Phantasm:Chapter One (Part Two)
Also, right, she wasn't even emotional about the entire affair, 'cause Rose already dumped Ken without Charles knowing it...will be affirmed on the next chapters... Just thanks, I guess I'll ...
May 18, 2009 -
Re: Phantasm:Chapter One (Part Two)
Also, right, she wasn't even emotional about the entire affair, 'cause Rose already dumped Ken without Charles knowing it...will be affirmed on the next chapters... Just thanks, I guess I'll ...
May 18, 2009 -
Re: Phantasm:Chapter One (Part Two)
Additional, the words I used, which were difficult for you, were the words I learned as I read Stephenie Mayer's books and that of J.K. Rowling's. Actually, upon encountering those ...
May 18, 2009 -
Re: Phantasm:Chapter One (Part Two)
Hippie! Thanks for the critique... Here are some clarifications and some things you needed to consider - I hope...hehe.. For all of you reading this part, please, do also read ...
May 18, 2009 -
Re: Phantasm:Prologue and Chapter one (Part one)
WHOA! Finally! Thanks Ashleigh Brown for the very nice compliment! I felt very inspired to continue my story! Also, thanks to Mars for the awesome review - I followed it! ...
May 16, 2009 -
Re: MV's Mystical/Awesome Reviews!
Heya! I would like you to review my works, but I guess you wont. They're somewhat scary, horror, but I swear, you'll enjoy them. So, please, I'm begging... hehe.. 'cause ...
May 15, 2009 -
Re: Love, in an elevator.
First, welcome to YWS! I certainly loved your work. It was quite new to me - very unique from any other Romantic fictions. The idea - the imagery and everything ...
May 15, 2009 -
Re: Sun
Heya! I really enjoyed reading your work, though it's a little bit short and I was left with unanswered inquisitions - as if mysteries :lol: . I hope you'll work ...
May 14, 2009 -
Re: Phantasm:Chapter One (Part Two)
Here's the continuation of my Phantasm's chapter one. I'm glad for giving my Part one seven stars, although what I really wanted are critiques. Just a huge thank for those ...
May 13, 2009 -
Re: Phantasm:Prologue and Chapter one (Part one)
This is my first novel ever. Hope to accomplish it accordingly. I must have put it in the non-fiction category 'cause this can really happen in real life. Anyway, the ...
May 9, 2009
