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It's an interesting piece, especially the ending! To be honest, at first I was confused a little, like "what's going on?". However, the ending made it all clear, and the ...

It's an impressive piece! The content is unusual, this makes your story different from all that I read before. However, there are some suggestions, hope they'll be helpful. 1) "The ...

His eyelids were half closed, and long strands of brown unshorn hair fell on the cold forehead. It was hard to say whether he was awake or not. His breath ...

Thank you very much for your review, it helps a lot! First of all, I'm sorry for the grammar mistakes, but I just can't correct them. The problem is that ...

To be honest, that's pretty scary... In a good meaning)) Honestly, I liked this piece even thought it's sad and difficult to read emotionally. Very good writing and deep feelings ...

Interesting poem showing how much people's words and thought differ. Like it very much! But try to work with punctuation, especially quotation marks, because somewhere it's hard to say who ...

The overall idea is great, and you are doing great job with using both short and long sentences, it makes the story more real. I've got only one question, why ...

I think there are thousands of people who would like this story, because so many of us have been in situations like this, felt the same things, asked the same ...

Souls “Hey, if I were you, I would never do that, I swear! Listen to me, girl, he is hopeless. I know what I'm saying.” His face was so strict ...

I can't even describe how much i like this description! It's awesome, it's lively, so real. To be honest, descriptions of nature are one of my favorite things to write ...

I really liked your poem, it makes the reader feel as if everything described in it happens to him/her. The only thing I would recommend you to change is the ...