navi2live

So... she's going back? to the place she was in before she was in the forest all of a sudden? and was it the gods who fastforwarded time? or did ...

Your style of writing reminds me of poetry in the way you do it. I was sort of confused when it was a new scene or a new pov or ...

I love the ending. But I think you need to put more inner thoughts so they can transition form thought to thought smoothly insted of just talking inside his head, ...

It was a pretty short chapter and we still don't know why she's in the forest or how she got there, I imagin there is an explanation comming hopefully. I ...

I think that you shouldn't have skipped to the wedding, I think that writing about how he no longer visited her, or how there were rumors of a betrothal, and ...

I agree with the fist comment. It is refreshing to see a Cinderella story that is not overdone. However, I have read all 14chs. and I think something is missing. ...