natalie

lol, its a different name. and I accidentally put Ash. Ill change it. lol. thank you.

I thought this was a really good beginning to a story. It invites many questions and opens up many interesting twists and opportunities. Good Luck with it!!

thanks for all the tips guys. I really appreciate it. i shall get to work on it as soon as possible.

I just thought I'd let you know that I really enjoyed this poem. It is short and to the point, easy to read and has a good rhythm. Keep up ...

heres another comment, because you have added so much more to the story since last time. Firstly, I thought that Id say that the comforting, real family feeling really brings ...

Oh My God WOW!!! This is so cool! i love the way that it still makes sense somehow, even though it is all completely nonsense! (or is that just my ...

Hi At the moment the poem seems very broken, if you were to style it better, with more obvious verse etc it would run more smoothly.