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narniej

  • Short Story » Realistic, General Re: It Got To Him

    ...freckled face, his gorgeous gray-brown eyes, and... Such a lovely description up until this point. "Gorgeous" is a very normal term. I would try something less common, more meaningful. ...If ...

    Tue Feb 14, 2012 5:05 am


“If lightning is the anger of the gods, then the gods are concerned mostly about trees.”
— Lao Tzu