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Yo, The young reader tends to go with the flow of the narrative, and identy himself/herself with the main protagonist, and take things at face value. In a baby-talk narrative, ...

Yo Dubaian, thank you for the detailed feedback, concerning wording and paragraphs. And the wordcount - I had complitely missed the point with the story being too big. Perhaps it ...

13/09/2009 I'll let this story sleep for a week, then I'll look at it again, edit, and send it to some magazine or other. So, anyone who can read sci-fi ...

Thanx to everyone for their reviews, especially for reminding me not to write numbers with... numbers :D It seems the reader of the Perished needs to feel the sand beneath ...

Yo Mo, thanxs for the review. It is a skeleton story, it can be inflated to twice its size, or to a vigenette, but I don't think i'll do that ...

Another attempt of the begining of a snail paced story on a moon orbiting a gas giant :smt002

Fan fiction it is Snoik, although I really am not a great fan of 40K, I leafed through two books, was not intruiged, but found the context interesting, and tried ...

Aye, more plot please, this could go into any direction. Could even be on another planet no? No grammar comments form me, I've yet to make my peace with English ...