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:elephant: (a galerius parody) Hihi Zenjoy, the reek of putrifaction from the decaying carcass of this homunculus which you have grown in your laboratories is a testament to your sparks ...

Yo, Oh my, what a lovely little story (I thought as I started reading) Oh my, what a lovely little beginning of a story (I thought as I finished reading) ...

Yo, just finished your piece. The plot... is of the type I hate, but! - I've learned to see past my dislikes and revulsions, haha. Your style is pretty good. ...

Hey, verrrry snappy story. Three internal consistency warnings: 1. The wounded comrade will hardly actually compliment the other one about 'good thinking with the barricade'. Unless he is a die-hard ...

Yo, just read your story! It starts like a classic in the genre, which is super. This bit at the end: The man flinched. He paused in thought for a ...

Yo! Always nice to see someone maintain the post nuclear apocalypse scenario. I also have a fetish for it, Robert Heinlein's and Frederik Pohl's renditions are my favorites. WWIII, and ...

Er, want me to copy the story and underline stuff? Just kidding, my grammar is non-existent, I always do content reviews only :D A nice dramatic 'origin' story we are ...

Yo, this piece is a nice impressionist painting of a chopper battle. It's fun to start reading and suddenly appear to be in the midst of flying rockets and swirling ...

Yo, so... the plot thickens :D I mighty matriarch somewhere far away pulling string to get three babies killed before they reach twenty. The matrirch is fond of torture and ...

Yo, I can't stand school drama (almost as much as vampire and pirate fiction), but you have an exellent opening paragraph which introduces everything we need to know about the ...

Yo, to disagree slightly with another reviewer - this chapter starts perfectly. It doesn't need a hook - the hook is in the prologue. It worked on the reader, hooked ...

Yo, I must say, the plot develops at breakneck speed! Figuratively and literaly hehe. Obviously this is the near future on Earth or an Earth-like planet. Perhaps I am prejudiced ...

A very abrupt beginning, what can I say? It could go anywhere from here, but you absolutely must beef it up with descriptions, thoughts, with style in general. Otherwise it ...

Yo! An intriguing begging! Since 27 is killed of so early, either a ressurection awaits as, or a revenge or something. And we are also to find out whether this ...

Yo, a very nice beginning, feels like a modern fairy-tale, which no doubt is part of your intent. I was half expecting the evil old woman to offer someone an ...