myruin

I rather like your poem. =) It makes me think, and that's what writing should do for the reader, make them think. As far as a review, I didn't see ...

I know this poem's kinda short, and is going to be hard to review, but I really wanted to share it with you all. =) Your comments on how to ...

Wow. Creepy... really gave me the shivers for a second. Now, to the review! 1) I would make your characters a little more... individual. They all seem to bled together ...

These two lines bug me a little, because of their length: What a cute couple we would make, they say, how in love we seem. Our innocent giggles sound to ...

I really liked this, and think it has the potential to be a really epic (my favorite word) poem. It could use more substance, more poetic devices, some punctuation, but ...

Nice :D . I like the first two lines a lot. I can really relate. You say fear quite a bit... maybe a little more than you really need to. ...

This is a short little poem I wrote when I was at a very dark time in my life. It's not perfect, and I would greatly appreciate some help to ...

Amazing. I love this poem. You have such a way with words. My favorite line is "Hands outstretched- she welcomes Dawn." I can see it in my mind as clear ...

Hi! I really liked reading your poem. Like the others said, you lose a little with the last line being so long. Also, you might want to use some stronger ...

Hi! I'm myruin. I'm 16 and have been writing fiction since the second grade, which may not seem like a long time to some, but it does to me. :D ...