mynameisTyler

felt tip fingers, the wondrous mingling intertwined interlaced interlocking inserted insecure sweet anxiety, the thumping chest arrested soft and sweet his lips so soft trailing below the lines summer

This piece is absolutely brilliant. I'm giving this one a star. I really enjoyed how you turned such a simple personally reflective concept into this amazing piece of art. I ...

Hey guys. I just dropped by to introduce myself, I'm still new around here and I still find the general interface (especially for the the profile toggling) a tad bit ...

a letter to i—youth IDEOLOGY to the youth, i fear not, [s]not[/s] be beguiled for even obscured, don't day insecure exit immersed excess of ego physical explored, imagined ideal implore ...

hmmm. This is ok. I see a lot of potential in your writing style. I agree with bailecielo, you have to check the rhythm, and you DEFINITELY have to work ...

@KnightlyAngel09: Hey! I know it's a bit difficult so thanks for taking some time for this poem. Yes it is about life in general, although another way of looking at ...

in bold are the references and minor additions, strikethroughs are omissions, comments are italicized-underlined ~~~~~~ Every four days he would come home, smiling or frowning. I'd say "smiling, frown

I think that this poem was a little too direct. Too much was said, and little was left to be "experienced". Although of course this will generally be effective in ...

I'm really impressed by this. Congratulations! It's brilliant. To think he's a book character! You managed to depict love so exhilaratingly without going "twilight" on it. Hehe. It is very ...

This is really brilliant. excellent concept, style, structure. Good job. -Tyler

I am really excited by this poem as this is generally among the kind of styles that I am particularly interested in. So lets begin. I put lines that I ...

I am really excited by this poem as this is generally among the kind of styles that I am particularly interested in. So lets begin. I put lines that I ...

You seem to be emulating the essence of Max Ehrman, and that's a good thing. On capitalizing the lines, consider what style you are using. Does your capitalization (or lack ...

you're getting a little to conscious about what you're writing and its starting to show on the poem, I recommend that you "chill" and gather your thoughts, then give it ...

I really like the images you used in the poem, they were very vivid and powerful, I think creating the universe is probably your best skill as a writer. I ...