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Re: What Are You Writing Now?
Basically, it's a journey through why and what is wrong with today, but that in the end, things end up terribly; best way I can describe it as of now.
Jul 18, 2009 -
Re: poem
This is a solid piece, but the only, one, real criticism I can throw down is that overall it seems a bit formulaic. I can tell you are a great ...
Jun 24, 2009 -
Re: Broken Bottles
This was an interesting piece. The emotion was powerful, and I can tell that there is a defined idea you're trying to get at, but I don't know if the ...
May 27, 2009 -
Re: Hurting
I'm kinda confused on what all is going on in this. Is there some sort of class war between the people living in one neighborhood and the ones in the ...
May 27, 2009 -
Re: Violence in motion
*Attention! The material involved in this story is extremely offensive and racially intolerant! Keep an open mind while reading this, it is trying to touch on the social unrest that ...
May 21, 2009 -
Re: Nightfall - Love
Growl! You just a bad kitty ain't you?
May 19, 2009 -
Re: The Man of Many Words
[quote]The Man of Many Words My heart is slowly lit, by hollow expressed with wit. But I'll remain on guard, for love is still too cold . I won't forget ...
May 19, 2009 -
Re: Can I brake?
Great Job! I only have two small suggestions, I can almost hear it crack, maybe change it to I can hear it moan and shake, the second, can I leave ...
May 19, 2009 -
Re: Resurrection, Inversed
I liked this, i wont lie, i did get kinda lost in it's length towards the middle, but I loved the ending; it was very quaint and somber. I will ...
May 19, 2009 -
Re: Black
I liked the repetition of black, added for an interesting tone. I like it the way it is, but possibly you could go for a theme where you contrast black ...
May 18, 2009 -
Re: The girl in the background
Her words are lost, they're silenced by the ignorance maybe Her words are lost, silenced by their ignorance. Of the people who don't know her, people that pass her by. ...
May 18, 2009 -
Re: I Need You To Write. - 1. Part 1.
I'm very excited by what could happen with this story! I have absolutely no clue where it is going though... I mean I can guess it has something to do ...
May 18, 2009 -
Re: The Weight of Suicide
I liked what I read! I am pretty tired so I didn't really catch all the deep details, but from what I caught it was extremely emotional! Is this going ...
May 18, 2009 -
Re: So much anger.
Why is it that I dwell on it so much? I just continuously sit there and place them as the superior being? WHY?! I just have to make them the ...
May 18, 2009 -
Re: I don't know :P (and springrain chose the title, so ha!)
I'm just going to say I have no clue what's going on in this... I don't know who toast is, but this poem made me smile, and scratch my head.
May 18, 2009
