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Re: The Chains of Duty Chapter 2: The Spell
Yay, you wrote a second chapter! And for the first time ever, I have suggestions for you. Here they are: (1) "She heard the wind whistling in through her open ...
May 18, 2014 -
Re: The Chains of Duty Chapter 1: Enemies We Were, What Are We Now?
AMAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAZING! So this is what you made of it? Seriously man, this is a great improvement after the first draft I read. You did a great job! I like how ...
Apr 21, 2014 -
Re: Makeshift | Chapter One
Well...what can I say? This was amazing. Perfect vocabulary, sentence structure, flow of writing...and it was all so vivid. And yes, the only thing I can suggest is: more simple ...
Feb 16, 2013