mphillips

The rain had only been coming down for couple hours and it had already flooded the yard. Comma aftere hours. Jake thought they were cattle rustlers and shot off a ...

It was unspoken but we both knew that there would be no sleep that night. You need a comma before but. Driving first down to Chico in the dark we ...

I'm pretty new around here too, so I'm not really able to answer you question. I'd say do whatever you want because I doubt it's really going to matter that ...

The chill of the air seeped through my skin and into my bones so that every inch of my body was freezing. The ice cold water of the swamp was ...

I really enjoyed reading this; the overall story was fun to read. Although the plot was interesting, it's grammatical errors make it slighty less pleasing. I found myself reading parts ...

First of all, I really liked the idea of this. The whole concept of everything being related was intriguing. However.... I thought the first paragraph was kind of simply and ...

I liked this alot. I want to know if you were told to make this so short for your assignment. It's good the way it is, but I think you ...

Hey ya'll-this is just the beginning of one of my stories. I'll post the rest if anyone wants. I just thought I'd keep this short...idk...ya ok...here it goes... I ran ...

I think this has a lot of potential. There are some typos, but those are easily fixed. Most of the things that bothered me were already pointed out by others, ...

Wow-this is greaty written. The description is perfect-not to much but enough to give me a vivid picture. I could see everything you described in my head, and it made ...

Um...I don't really know what I'm doing. Just thought I'd say Hi because I didn't want everyone thinking I was a loner. This site sounds pretty cool; I've been lookin ...