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Thanks everyone for critiquing this. This is my first ever shot at writing a screenplay, so I appreciate all of the input and will add it all into the screenplay. ...

Well, you could try and leave or you could settle yourself and see Arthur walk into the area.

I kind of worked it in in my most recent post. You guys can take it from there.

Althea dove into the dark depths of the river and swam right into a large clump of sea grass. When she came out of the other side, she found a ...

EVIL- Laufeia The ground where the dead human soldier lay, caved in and smoke rose from the giant hole. A hand rose out of the hole and grabbed on to ...

Name: Laufeia Race: Demon Prof.: Shadowstalker Appearance: She's 6'4", has long green hair, yellow eyes, dark brown skin, and razor sharp teeth. Abilities: Breathes a poison that can paralze, kill, ...

Name: Bellatrix (Bella) Claw: Sky Appearance: An all black cat. She has green eyes. Traits: She is outgoing and fun, though she has a hard time making friends in her ...

Althea pulled herself slowly out of the water and looked around. Most of the people who had been around had scattered and they few people who were left were only ...

I love a lot of the corrections you've made, especially the added stanzas. It helped the poem develop more into dramatic poetry which storytells a lot more than other forms ...

Okay, you had some good images in the poem, but there needs to be more. I don't know why the character in this poem is doing what they do. It ...

This is a very good poem, something you might find in a poetry slam. Rythm isn't necessary all the time with poetry, especially with dramatic poetry. It's all in the ...

From what I've read, you have written a poem about one of my favorite literary characters who can be found in "Invisible Monsters." Am I correct? If I am, I ...

I liked the split view in this poem. It is definitely an interesting topic. First, is there a certain reason you capitalize the start of every line? If there is, ...

As Althea watched the scene unfold before her eyes, something strange happened. A woman, a goddess as Althea would see it, appeared from thin air. She was dressed in a ...

FADE IN: INT. HIGH SCHOOL – HALLWAY - MIDDAY A bell sounds and students begin to flood the hallway. There is a musky smell in the air and the dingy, ...