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Re: The Story of an Elevator
Hi, I really liked this but I think you could have added more detail and description. Especially when your MC is in the lift and realizing just how claustrophobic she ...
Jul 21, 2009 -
Re: Where are my memories?
Hi I've just read your lyrics and they're very good. I think with a bit of work it could be brilliant. At the moment it seems slightly more like a ...
Jul 21, 2009 -
Re: Scarlett Johansson
Hi, I really liked your work! It was extremely good and I think the eyes and hair were very good. Will look out for your further work. Moonstar x
Jul 20, 2009 -
Re: no title yet: Actress meets guy on a bus part two!
The next day I sat in my cupboard of a dressing room looking in my wonky mirror. All I had on was some trackie bottoms and sweater. Which was cleverly ...
Jul 20, 2009 -
Re: Valen
HI, I loved your poem. It was short and sweet but so powerful. I got a really good picture in my head of what you were trying to say. I ...
Jul 20, 2009 -
Re: Sugar Coated Happiness
Hello, I've just read your poem and it's so good! I don't think it had the best flow but what can I say I'm only a humble Novice. But apart ...
Jul 20, 2009 -
Re: Love Isn't Magic
HI I've just read your piece and it was brilliant! I really liked the way you described the scene. It was clear to see what the characters thoughts were how ...
Jul 20, 2009 -
Re: Take me to a place with no name
Hello, I read your poem and it was wonderful! It had a brilliant flow and really went deep if you get my meaning. Only think I'd say is your grammar ...
Jul 19, 2009 -
Re: No title yet: Actress meets guy on a bus
I took a deep breath. The air was humid so that breath didn't really help, it just made me more nervous. Great last thing I need! I wipe my sweaty ...
Jul 18, 2009 -
Re: Chapter 3. still untitled rock star's unlikely love
Hello. Just read chapter three of your story. Now judging that I haven't read the last two chapters... I still loved it! It was written so well and I loved ...
Jul 18, 2009 -
Re: Goodbye my friend
Hello, I've just read your lyrics and they're really good. I can easily put a rhythm to them in my head and it flows really well. :D Keep writing, Moonstar ...
Jul 18, 2009 -
Re: Of Heaven and Holes
Hi really liked your poem. It was different and interesting, not what you'd expect. Only thing I say is that the poem's called 'Heaven and holes ' but you only ...
Jul 16, 2009 -
Re: I fell in love once
I fell in love once, With someone just like me. With a silent way of saying, I love you but keep praying. I fell in love once, With constant worry ...
Jul 16, 2009 -
Re: My Mother and I
This is probably the most unhelpful review you've ever got but all I can say is that is was BRILLIANT! Moonstar x
Jul 16, 2009 -
Re: Transient and unformed.
Hi to put it simply I loved it! It was very good and I can access what you mean instantly. I've know things like that to go on in my ...
Jul 16, 2009
